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Applecores and Rainbows
By CosmicWaltz

Chapter 4


Birds gently called out the sun's rise outside of the Apple home. Dash drifted back into consciousness as hooffalls drew near from the hall. She could smell a meal being cooked from somewhere downstairs. Breakfast in bed, she thought. Sounds great.

"Mmm, good morning, babe," the pegasus responded blissfully, hugging the mare between her and the wall beside the bed.

Wait...

Dash slowly opened her drowsy eyes. Sure enough, the golden mane of her partner was before her. If it wasn't AJ entering the room, then...

"Well, mornin' to you too, Rainbow." Big Macintosh responded from the foot of the bed, a chuckle in his voice.

Dash immediately shot to attention, rolling off the bed with a loud thud as she hit the floor. "OH! Uh, Big Mac!" She tensed at the sight of the stallion. "Uh, I was just... sleeping over for the night." Her eyes must have been as wide as saucers.

Applejack shuffled on her side of the small bed, turning her face from the wall. "Ugh... What's all the racket?" Quickly, the mare found the bright morning light to be a nuisance.

Big Macintosh pushed a tray he had placed on the corner of the bed forward. "Ah just thought you two'd like somethin' fer breakfast."

AJ scrutinized the meal before her. Her head was plagued by a dull, persistent throbbing. On one plate, positioned to Dash's side, sat an apple and a stack of maple syrup topped pancakes. On AJ's side, however, sat a sliced orange and mug of black coffee.

"What the hay is this?" Applejack replied to the dish before her. "Yer givin' me an orange fer breakfast? You big oaf, oranges ain't apples!"

Big Macintosh seemed unfazed by the small insult. "Oranges're good fer the hangover after a night'a drinkin'. So is coffee. Trust me, you'll thank me fer it."

"What's a 'hangover?'" the orange pony asked, oblivious to the affliction she suffered.

"Does it feel like ya got a swarm'a bees buzzin' in yer head?" the red stallion asked.

AJ massaged her temples in small circles. Oh, yeah, it definitely felt like that. "So this's what Ah get fer drinkin' that stuff. Wish somepony would'a told me. Give me that dang orange." As much as she disliked the sour fruit, she was willing to do anything to get rid of the headache. "Hey, how'd you know Ah'd been drinkin'? Or that Dash was here, fer that matter?"

It was a good question, Dash remarked. She had thought they had entered stealthily enough, though the more she reflected on it, the more she began to remember clambering about on the stairs with the earth pony.

Big Macintosh smiled. "Ah heard the two'a ya come in last night. And you was either drunk, or had one'a yer hooves tied to ya." He turned to the pegasus. "You gonna eat yer breakfast?"

Dash caught herself squirming under his gaze. "Uh, yeah, sure!" She looked to AJ, a nervous smiled brimming on her face as she tried to cover up the scene. "That, uh, that sure was one great sleepover, wasn't it AJ? Haha!"

AJ laughed softly, trying not to upset her demanding headache. "Sure was, there, Feather-Flank." She leaned over, kissing the pegasus lightly on the nose. "By the way, Dashie, Big Macintosh already knows about us. Ya ain't gotta worry about him."

Dash was lit with a blush by the affectionate kiss. She turned incredulously to the red stallion.

"Eeyup," he replied. "Ah'll leave you two t' yer breakfast. By the way, AJ, it's yer turn to sweep out the barn today."

AJ drank a bit too heavily from the mug of coffee at the notice. "What?! Ah did it last time! It's yer t-" She suddenly remembered the arrangement from yesterday, and how his chores were now hers. "Aw, dangit. Yer right. Just let mah head quiet down a little first, would'ya?" She swore she would never drink alcohol again.

The large pony left the couple, shutting the door behind himself.

Dash still sat on the floor, taking a bite of the apple she had taken from the tray. "So, how long has he known?"

AJ finally put away the last of the bitter brew in her cup. "Well, really, he knew before we did. After ya asked me out, Ah needed advice. Ya don't mind, do ya?"

Dash smiled. "Hey, if he's the reason you ever went out with me, I'm fine with it!" This brought up another concern. "Which reminds me, AJ, did you really mean what you said last night?"

Applejack squinted as she bit into more sour orange pulp. "Which part? Ah'm not even sure Ah remember all'a the night."

"You said you didn't mind your family knowing about us," Dash recalled.

AJ winced a bit at the comment. "Well, Dashie... maybe. A lotta that was the wine talkin'."

Rainbow Dash had feared the answer, deflating a bit as the notion slipped from her. "Hey, I understand. It's cool."

AJ felt her heart break at the sight. "No, it ain't." She loved the pony, she knew, but was still fighting away her own worries. An idea came to her. "How about we start with our friends? It's about time we tell'em anyway, ain't it?"

Dash livened up at the mention. "You mean that AJ? Are you sure you're ready?" As much as she wanted to open up more, Dash knew what that could mean. She was used to being called a 'fillyfooler' from Flight School. She was used to the negative reactions. She didn't want AJ throwing herself into anything she didn't feel up for.

Applejack smiled at the reinvigorated pony. "Ah'm sure as sugar." She nuzzled the pegasus, before putting the tray on the nightstand. "We'll tell the girls today. Right after Ah get a bit more rest. So, would'ya like to get off'a the floor and get back in this bed with me, Dashie?"

Dash couldn't think of anything that sounded better.

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The couple had just left the Apple land, headed to Twilight's library. Slipping from the house, Rainbow Dash had organized a get-together with the girls for that evening while she waited for AJ to finish her newly acquired house chores.

The tree-built facility was now just a few steps ahead of them.

"AJ," Dash began to ask, "are you really sure you want to do this? I can't really guarantee they'll be fine with us. You don't have to do this for me."

Applejack returned a soft smile. "Rainbow, I'm sure. And Ah ain't doin' this just fer you, Dash. Ah'm doin' this fer us. Our dinner last night, well, it just tore me up havin' to fight mahself to pretend you was just a friend. And if we're gonna start anywhere, the girls're the best bet. Mah headache's gone, and Ah got you by mah side. Let's do this."

Dash felt comforted by her mare's words. She'd kiss her if it wasn't for the crowded streets around them.

The two entered the small library. It was always a mystery to Dash how the building seemed to be much larger on the inside than it did from the outside. Sure enough, her friends were already there. Twilight was sitting at a small desk, a book in front of her as usual. Fluttershy and Rarity were both chatting about who knows what on one side of the room. Pinkie looked to be bugging Spike while he attempted to sort the many books stacked on the table. He was always a good sport about her wild nature.

"Ooh! Ooh! You're finally here!" Pinkie bounced over from beside the dragon, a relief spreading over his face as she did.

"Ah, there you two are! We've been waiting for you to arrive," Rarity spoke. "We thought you were going to keep us waiting forever!"

"FOREVER!" Pinkie shouted, giggling to herself afterwards. "Although, we really couldn't wait 'forever' forever. Forever is a really really really really long time. That'd just be silly!"

Twilight placed a page-marker in her book, closing it up on the table. She turned to the couple that entered the room. "Hi Dash, Applejack. Well, we're all here. What was the news you needed to tell us?"

This was it, AJ thought. This was when she had to put it on the line. Her friends would understand. They would support them... wouldn't they? Only one way to know.

"Well, me and Dash got somethin' to say." She felt her nerves bubbling beneath her coat. She tried not to let her legs shake, but failed, feeling her knees tremble. "Well, we,... uh,... ya see, we got somethin' to tell ya..."

Her mind went blank. She had frozen. She couldn't do this. Why did she think she could?

Then there was a wing over her, cradling her to the blue pegasus beside her. Dash. Dash was there. "Need me to say it?" the winged pony asked. The other girls looked more confused now than ever.

AJ knew she could say it if Dash was with her. "Nah. Ah got this." She turned back to their friends, taking a deep breath. "Girls, me an' Dash are... we're together." It was probably the least romantic way to say they were involved, but the fact that she had managed to say anything filled her with pride.

The room suddenly burst with bright blue and yellow confetti seemingly from nowhere. "CONGRATULATIONS, GIRLS!" Pinkie suddenly announced, somehow having vanished from the group before them to being behind the couple, hugging them each with one foreleg. How she did that, they would never know.

Rarity was the next to speak. "Oh, that's just marvelous! You two make such a lovely couple!"

Fluttershy followed soon, her voice full of hushed excitement. "I'm so happy for you both! Yay!" She spoke barely above a whisper, but both Dash and AJ knew that was still a great sign.

Twilight, however, did not respond. She stood, staring oddly at the couple in her library.

A distant spark of worry was reignited within AJ's heart as Twilight's expression let air to the flame. She didn't approve?

With her five friends' eyes upon her, Twilight finally spoke. "I... I don't think I follow. What do you girls mean?" A biting trepidation gnawed inside the romantic pair.

Rarity quickly walked over to the purple unicorn, whispering in her ear. After a few airy words, Twilight drew away, looking to the white unicorn with an even more puzzled expression. "What's a 'fillyfooler?'"

Rarity blushed red, her secret conversation revealed to be less than graceful. "Oh, hahaha, Twilight dear, you know what I mean!" She glanced to the couple, hoping they weren't offended by the word.

Spike walked to Twilight with a large book in his clawed hands. "I'm not finding any 'fillyfooler' in the dictionary, Twilight. Maybe it starts with a 'ph?'"

Rarity blushed even more. "Oh, for Celestia's sake!" She returned to whispering in Twilight's ear.

Twilight looked at the two ponies in question as she took in the unicorn's words. "Uh huh. Okay. Huh? Oh? Oh. Oh! OH!" The pony's face turned a deep red, eyes wide at the realizatoin. She smiled to the pair. "You could have just said they were dating, Rarity! Congratulations you two!"

A relief washed over Dash and Applejack. Twilight always was the naive one. Now, though, both wondered what the glamorous unicorn had whispered in her ear to get that reaction.

Spike closed the book, putting on a bewildered look. "Wait, they're dating? But, aren't you both mares? How does that work?"

"Oh, Spike," Twilight spoke up, trying to nimbly avoid repeating the awkward explanation she had just received herself. "It doesn't matter what they are. If they're both in love, that's what really matters!"

The dragon put on a face of disgust. "Bleh, sounds sappy."

Twilight quickly prodded at his side, correcting his manner. "Oh, uh, I mean, that's great, guys!" There was a laugh all around.

AJ could still feel her heart pounding in her chest, but the fear had been replaced. She was overcome with an uplifting joy. Her friends had accepted them. She didn't need to care what any other pony thought, now. She knew she and Dash would always have support now.

"This is going to make such a great report to the Princess!" It was like Twilight had slammed on the brakes, lurching the couple forward in place.

"Wait!" Dash responded quickly. "Twilight, you can't tell the Princess about us!"

The purple unicorn giggled. "Why not? I'm sure she'll be happy for both of you!"

Dash knew she was right. "Well, maybe. But we really haven't come out to any other pony yet."

"Then we'll just have to throw a 'coming out' party for you guys!" Pinkie joined in. "That's sure to let everypony know!"

Dash's expression fell to one of horror when she realized they may have opened Pandora's Box by telling their friends.

"Pinkie Pie, Ah don't think ya get it," AJ responded. "We're not really open about this sorta thing yet."

"But you told us! I'm sure every pony will be just as excited!" the pink party pony exclaimed, inattentive to the serious nature of what she was proposing.

"Wait, wait, WAIT!"

The room fell silent. Dash hadn't meant to yell so loud. She settled back to the ground from the hover she found herself in. "Look, it's not that we don't want to be open about it. We're just, taking it slow, okay?"

Fluttershy, staying quiet for most of the conversation, joined in. "Well, can we throw you a private party? Just for us?"

AJ looked to the blue pegasus beside her, a radiant happiness in her eyes. "Well, that sure does sound awfully fun. Whaddaya say, Dashie?"

Rainbow Dash blushed. She loved that name, especially the way Applejack said it. "Well, if it's just us, then cool! That sounds awesome!"

There was flash of pink streamers and balloons. Pinkie again exploded into action. "YIPPIE! We are going to throw you guys the best party!" Where did that pony keep getting all these things on instant notice? "Ooh! We gotta have a cake! And punch, and cupcakes, and teacakes, and SO MUCH CANDY! And streamers and confetti, and then backup confetti in case something happens to the first batch of confetti! And balloons! Dozens of balloons, in every color of the rainbow! And every color of an apple! Although, I think red covers most apples, doesn't it? Red's in the rainbow, right? And we need a piñata, and party games and-" Pinkie continued to rattle off party supplies, seemingly to herself. She was enthusiastic, at least.

Dash laughed at her friend's antics. "Pinkie Pie, you are so random!"

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Dash sat on a small cloud outside of Sweet Apple Acres. Though the day had been great for both of them, AJ was still nervous about telling her family. Dash understood the worry, and told her to open the window to her room when she was alone to signal for the pegasus.

It was just before sundown when the window was finally opened by an orange pair of hooves. Dash quickly flew into the small room.

"Geez, 'Jacks, it's about time you let me in!" the pegasus called.

"Sorry 'bout that Rainbow," Applejack replied. "Ah had to wash the dishes. It was Big Macintosh's night, but, Ah owe him." The earth pony moved over to nuzzle her mare. "Ah'm mighty glad you waited for me though."

The gentle rubbing of cheeks soon found the pair locked in another deep kiss. Both ponies fought to explore the other's mouth as tongues slid over each other in a blissful dance. As Applejack pressed further into the kiss, Dash pushed back. Before long, both ponies were reared on their back hooves, forelegs wrapped around each other. The pair had never kissed so deeply before, and the blue pegasus took advantage, wrapping the earth pony tightly in her wings as her hooves rubbed the curves of the farmer's sides. Hot breath escaped in broken bursts, each pony enjoying each other far too much to separate for more than an instant. In a heated madness, Dash found her hooves moving lower down the pony's sides, gently caressing her apple-marked flanks.

"Dash, wait," AJ interrupted, moving back from the kiss.

Almost at once, Dash realized just how far she had pressed the pony.  She bashfully stepped back onto all hooves. "Sorry, Applejack. I guess I got carried away." She wasn't sorry. She wanted so much more now.

"No, Dash," AJ continued, "Ah just wanted to ask... could ya lock the door?"

Dash felt the blood spike to her cheeks. Her wings fluttered, slowly unfurling from her sides involuntarily. "S-sure thing, AJ."

The pegasus moved to the door at her side, sliding the metal lock into place. Turning around, she saw Applejack at the window, closing the wooden shutters. She turned to Dash, a playful, shy smile across her freckled cheeks.

"AJ?" Dash began, walking over to nuzzle her mare. "Are we about to do what I think we're about to do?" She braced herself to be called a gutter-brain again.

The farmer pony blushed. "Well,... Ah think so, Dash." She leaned forward, nibbling gently on the blue mare's withers and up her neck. "If yer interested."

Dash's wings answered far before she found her own voice again. AJ giggled at the display. She whispered in the pegasus' ear, her voice low and sensual. "You silly filly."
Chapter 1: [link]
Chapter 2: [link]
Chapter 3: [link]
Chapter 4: [link]
Chapter 5: [link]

FROM THE DEPTHS OF WRITER'S BLOCK I RISE AS A PHOENIX!

Well, this was certainly a test of my abilities. O.o See, with this story having no true direction, I wrote myself into a bit of a wall. After a complete shut down, I resorted to heavy doses of progressive music and a few scenes of MLP for reference. In no time at all, I ran headlong into the wall, and somehow found myself on the other side with less brain-trauma than I anticipated. Also fun, on the back of the wall was a directory, which told me I was right by the exit to Plot Device Junction!

I won't spoil the next chapter. Let's just say it's a party, and perhaps the wheels of fate are turning. ^^

Also, I know you all hate me for what you're not seeing between this and the next chapter. XP Use your imaginations!

Hasbro is probably building an army with this show. They have full rights to "My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic," and all elements seen herein.
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Tozakfur Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012
Whistles~
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*claps*

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What are we doing? >.>
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PeteeP-Pie Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   General Artist
*Sneezes* 
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*burps*
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shadowrain1000 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Lol, never realized that about the library. Maybe it's a TARDIS in disguise!
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Despite my love of the Doctor, I based that little line more on the House on Ash Tree Lane from "House of Leaves". XP
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El-Jorro Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012
Love the sexual tension. Sometimes implied is sexier than explicit
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It can be titillating, what's not said. XP
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Ragnarok311 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
WINGBONER
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LongshotLink Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love Rarity trying to explain it to Twilight and both of them ending up extremely embarrassed. Just the imagery of her whispering in Twi's ear and Twilight's eyes going wide with the blush filling her face, it's just so adorable. And the dictionary. It's not under f, maybe it starts with a ph. Oh my goodness that was funny.
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Had fun with that scene. XP Never did fully plan out what Rarity would say, but imaginations are fun like that.
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fleaboy498 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Normally don't do shipfics, but this was perfect. Very well executed. I enjoyed reading it.
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BDassassin Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
bigger on the inside. Love dr.who
good story man
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Actually, as much as I love Doctor Who, that wasn't a reference to the show. It was really a nod to the book "House of Leaves" by Mark Z. Danielewski. Both, however, are awesome!
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fleaboy498 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
good book. ridiculous waste of paper sometimes though lol, but my copy is worn the heck out
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
The abuse of formating on the pages is no waste for that story. It added wonderfully to the discordant, panicked style of the chapters. And of course, then there's the chapter I call "Footnote Hell", where the additions are EVERYWHERE! XD
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BDassassin Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
dont know the book.
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's... peculiar. XD That's a way to say it.
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BDassassin Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011
Ill have to look into it
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
What I can say is that at the heart of the tale, the initial story could be something from a Doctor Who episode. Or Silent Hill. It's a happy medium.
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BDassassin Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011
Dr. Who goes to silent hill. That would be an amazing crossover
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Actually, I don't know. The Doctor would kinda kick Silent Hill's ass, what with his existence being outside of our dimensions and without the human condition. Though, it could have some fun with him before spitting him out. He'd be fine, though. I mean, sent back in time to the 69s, without the TARDIS, he was still able to find his way back. He came back from the future to tell his companions to get him out of the Pandorica so that he could then go back in time to tell them to get him out of the Pandorica. Dude's a wizard. XD Still, it would be fun to see his personified demons. Maybe see the Nightmare Version of himself again, where he tortured himself between two realms to discover which was dream.

It has potential, even if you know he'd be fine. Now, throw the companions in, and THEN the party could start! A world that shows what you fear and what you hide, and I'm sure there are a lot of secrets to let those who follow him see. >w>

Oh, dear, I'm getting geeky. -_- My bad.
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DooDawDay Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm actually rather glad you tastefully left it to the reader's imagination. I think any further and it would have broken the intimacy of the chapter.
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malanaks Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
seconded
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MissingTheMoon Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
Brilliantly written, great coupling, lots of hug stupid smiles on my part(:

I love the fact that it got saucy, just not overboard.
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BonXsig Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
That breakfast scene made me smile even more then last time.
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Deviatealittle Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011
Still as brilliantly executed as always. I loved the scene with big mac (and the term 'feather-flank'), I thought the bit with twilights reaction was wonderfully in character and funny as hell, and in general, cute set-up all around.

however... the borderline clopfic at the end... While I love "friendshipping", and certain relationship building isn't taboo either, when it gets to descriptions of cartoon equines going at it, I bail like its the fucking titanic. slightly creepy.
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I can see how it could be viewed that way. I personally don't have a problem with the more suggestive works, or even outright clopfics (though, I still prefer those to be story-driven, which means it's a rare moon that any of those pop up). Well, just that end of this chapter mention is all of that in the story, so never fret.
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
Bwahahahaha! Best one yet XD You really grasped Pinkie's wall-breaking nature, not to mention Dash's wingboner at the end, Rarity's "explanation" to Twilight and Big Macintosh's appearance by the bed XD I actually laughed out loud at those times.

And the emotion :) I could completely picture me and my girlfriend (although I'm a boy and we're not ponies) in the same sensual scene.

How the hay do ya do it? XD

... wait a... just got a great for a scene in my own current fanfic! Thanks man XD *brohoof*
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
That's kinda how it goes. XD That, and when I'm almost asleep, I get a lot of ideas for scenes. That's when I abuse the hell out of my iPhone's Note function. XD
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askesalsa Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
Haha, yeah, the ideas could find a better time of the day to pop into your head XD
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Nah. That's when I have the most time to day(night?)dream.
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MuffinShy Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have a suggestions, even tho you put it out better than some other writers and it doesn't feel forced, almost like a well versed verse, maybe you can put in more original things? Like a jelly fountain or strawberry muffins so it doesn't get old for poor Pinkie.
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm, that does work well. I think this one being done, I'm not sure if I should be editing it too much now. Maybe just a bit. And I'll keep it in mind for future works.
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MuffinShy Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's not like it asks for an edit just a thought for future.
I'll leave the pleasure of 5th chapter for tomorrow. :p
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Mazzyrazzy Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I loved this!

Honestly when I saw how fast Dash asked AJ out in Chapter 1, I thought the pacing in this story was going to be off, but you pulled it off wonderfully.

Just one mistake to correct in this one:

"It was just before sundown when the window was finally opened by an orange pair of hooves. Dash was quickly in the small room."

Dash was quickly in the small room doesn't make much sense. Maybe dash flew quickly? moved quickly? idk, your the writer, you'll think of something!
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Her and AJ have a good history, so I figure there wouldn't be much need to kick around the question in this one. Might as well start the plot strong.

Huh. I can make my guitar sound like a "Jurassic Park" movie velociraptor. It's endlessly entertaining!
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Adan-Cricjer Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"...I resorted to heavy doses of progressive music and a few scenes of MLP for reference."

What sort of progessive music?

Again the quality is keeping at even keel with the other chapters and Twilight's sheer cluelessness really made the coming out scene and injected an needed bit of tension into the proceedings.
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
The Mars Volta, in this case. Great stuff. Here's a link to one of their songs, "Day of the Baphomets". [link]

Really, I listen to a lot of prog rock and metal, from Yes to King Crimson, Tool, TMV, Rush, etcetera. Love the stuff. Makes my synesthesia go WILD!
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Adan-Cricjer Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Another KC fan? Cool.

You might want to check out one of Tony Levin's projects STICKMEN. From what I have heard of it it's fairly in line with the ggggrrrrrrr side of King Crimson.
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Vintage-Devil-Queen Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great work! :clap:

I thought everybody's reactions were believable; Twilight's made me laugh.

Although, I have a feeling that the Apple family's reaction *Except Big Mac* is going to be less than enthusiastic.

Are there going to be other pairings in this story?
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
That's something I've been debating, like a small story arc. Really, I guess it falls to how the story goes. >.> For this Chapter, I knew where I wanted it to begin and end, and the middle just bridged itself (after some frustrating little hang-ups, mind). I think I'm going to approach the next the same way.
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Vintage-Devil-Queen Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Even though you're the author, and it's entirely up to you, I still imagine the Apple family not being very happy about Rainbow Dash/Apple Jack's relatioship; I remember you mentioned in one of the chapters that most of the marriages in their family was arranged.

Or maybe the Apple family would have mixed feelings about the relationship? Like, they wouldn't entirely agree with it, but yet, they'd want Applejack to be happy?
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Family's are always a little weird around this topic. Speaking from experience, you can never really gage a reaction to something like that. In AJ's case, I'm still wondering. Though her family values the apple trade, you can see in a lot of episodes (Cutie Mark Chronicles being the best case) that they value family ties just as much. So, I suppose I'll see how it plays out in the work. >.>

The arranged marriage part just seemed to fit with her family. I find it hard to think that in a world where you can find your life goal is everything from raising the sun to popping balloons that everypony in her family just happened to end up with somepony related to apple farming. Living in the South, I can say that there are a few families I know of that gear their children to marrying someone that will benefit a family trade in the future. It's not really forced, just HIGHLY promoted. "She's from a good family" kinda stuff.
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Vintage-Devil-Queen Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah, I see.

Can't wait to see what happens. :)
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Larisouza Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011
Oh, sweet chapter!! =D
Awesome work, as always ^^
Loved Twilight's reaction, I really laughed at that XD~~
I'm eagerly waiting for the next one!
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Twilight's a bit slow to what she hasn't studied, but she has a good heart. And Spike is such a boy. XD It's really fun writing dialog for these characters, especially Pinkie. There will be more in the next Chapter, since I'm letting the perspective shift to their friend's point of view for a bit. ^^
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lollipopbrowser Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011
(Read this in Sean Connery's voice) Bravo shir, bravo...
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CosmicWaltz Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, shir!
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EquestriaDood Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011
EEEEEEYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYUUUUUUSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!
MORE DAMMIT!
XD
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